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May 19, 2011
The suggester says, Photographing a Scream by ~TransientTopHat is a "terrible and terrifying poem, conveying its subject with clear-eyed lucidity. The anger is tightly controlled, and used to drive the work, not to blind it." The poem is a well-crafted piece, built around a set of shocking images.
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Can't Go Back
"You can't go back," she said
chuckling a bit as I pushed past her.
I didn't understand.
No, it didn't make
much sense to me at all
and the green light
on the other side of the lake
seemed to creep closer
but somewhere deep down
perhaps in the murky waters below
perhaps somewhere inside my mind
or my heart or my soul
it had fallen
and I knew.
"You can't go back!" he called out
and the voice echoed for a while.
Of course I could.
Oh, I could
if I could only stay
in the saddle
on the beast
as it galloped to the top of the mountain
but somewhere below me
perhaps on the ground rushing past
perhaps from my hands clenched so
Literature
Punctuating Poetry Part One
Some people believe poetry shouldn't be punctuated and others are still taught to put a comma after every new line. So where is the balance? What does one - especially one new or growing in poetry - do? Well, that's simple: a poet must punctuate with purpose!
In order to punctuate with purpose, however, a poet must understand two things: what she wants to achieve with the poem and what a piece of punctuation can achieve in a poem. This means a poet must understand more than the common rules of punctuation; she must know the effect that certain punctuation points can have on a reader or in a text.
This overview tackles punctuation in poetry
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Feeding Time...
Feeding Time at the Sultan's Menagerie
My mother is a hyena
and when the men come to feed us
she makes a terrible noise that I can hear
even from across the zoo,
but they think it is laughter
and they don't know that it is her
saying the same thing she always does:
"More, more! Why isn't there more?"
She cannot help herself;
She is a scavenger.
When I was born, she picked me up
in jaws that can crush an elephant femur
and for a second, the keepers that watched her
held their breath, thinking she was
about to eat me.
Somehow I was spared
and even the poison of her saliva,
the festering bacteria that kills days later,
only
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Recently, Rolling Stone released a series of photographs revealing the atrocities committed by the "Kill Team," a small group of American troops in Afghanistan, many of whom will face trial.
--It's very very late at night.. erm.. or early in the morning.. and I just realized the Daily Deviation... I'm ecstatic!! Thank you all so much for the support and wonderful comments!!
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Questions for critique:
-Do the themes of "open" and "close" culminate in a meaningful way?
-Does the language of the poem ever feel too "flowery?"--as in, does the form of the poem not fit the content in certain spots?
My critique for thewrittenrevolution: [link]
--It's very very late at night.. erm.. or early in the morning.. and I just realized the Daily Deviation... I'm ecstatic!! Thank you all so much for the support and wonderful comments!!
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Questions for critique:
-Do the themes of "open" and "close" culminate in a meaningful way?
-Does the language of the poem ever feel too "flowery?"--as in, does the form of the poem not fit the content in certain spots?
My critique for thewrittenrevolution: [link]
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this makes me sad :/
(i'm from afghanistan)